JC#1

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So this takes place after the current Naruto storyline(part 2 or Shipuuden whatever) and after DBZ ends, DBGT isn't included cause appaerantly I'm the only one who likes GT.

Chapter 1: Confusion...

Naruto is raxing thruogh a forest somewhere, jumping from tree to tree.

"SASUKE!" He yells on his way there, "I'm going to find you Sasuke!" He drops onto the ground and begins to run. He runs into an area wher there doesn't seem to be many trees, and he sees Sasuke there holding Sakura, beat and battered, by her shirt collar.

"I swear if you hurt her-" "She isn't dead...Just unconsious. I was about to finish the job," Sasuke interrupted Naruto. Sasuke clutched his hand into a fist. He was about to punch Sakura when a Naruto shadow clone grabbed the fist.

"Is that ti? No new tricks? This was like the first jutsu you ever learned. Like I always used to say, you're nothing but a-" "I swear if you say I'm a loser one more time I'll kill you!" Naruto was the one doing the interrupting this time. A red aura began to glow and revolve around Naruto(not the shadow clone). He was tapping in to the chakra of the 9-tailed fox. The Earth beneath them began to shake.

"I WILL-...Wait...I'm not the one doing that..." Naruto said, frightened. He glanced towards the also confused Sasuke, who shook his head. The shadow clone poofed away.

Elsewhere, in the DBZ world, Goku and Uub are training in the hyperbolic time chamber. Uub was powering up and Goku was watching.

"That's it Uub. Just let all your power go," Goku instructed. The ground began to shake there too. In both the Naruto and DBZ worlds everything lights up and glows. In the next second, Naruto was in the forest near Goku's house, Goku was at konohagakure infront of the ichirakuu ramen shop (did I spell it right?), Sakura was still unconscious lieing down in the snow of Jingle Town(or is it Jungle town?) and Uub was in a dessert somewhere.

"What the heck is going on" they all ask accept for Sakura.

"Sasuke! Where are you?" Naruto yells.

"Oh no! Not another one!" Suno, at jingle town, sys as she picks up Sakura and brings her to her home. BTW, Suno has grown up now! At the dessert, Uub looks very confused. Finally he seems to understand(but he really doesn't)

"OH! I didn't know that the hyperbolic time chamber could change the terrain like this! It must be simulating Diablo Dessert!" Uub explained to himself. What he didn't seem to know was that the chamber was actually a different dimmension in the DBZ unverse, not a machine. Goku walks in to the ramen shop.

"Excuse me! Do you know where...we are right now? I got kinda...Lost," Goku giggled as he rubbed the back of his head. He noticed that Gohan was there, wearing an apron.

"GOHAN! You work at this place?" Goku asked, surprised.

"Uuhhhh...I guess so...It's my first day though" Gohan joked.

"Oh really!? Well good luck!" Goku said, naive.

"I was kidding," Gohan explained with his face suddenly not so cheerfull, reminded of his father's idiocy. They both walked out of the shop, Gohan took his apron off, and they flew off to the nearest high power level, hoping it would be someone they knew. After a long while, gathering other Z-warriors from around this warped globe, they noticed a power level that couldn't be one of theirs because they were all together.

"Let's see who this is!" Goku yelled, excited of the high pl. The pl wasn't just high...In fact compared to them it was a little weak, but the interesting thing was that the power wasn't made of ki...But some other energy... They landed in Jungle town, Goku being nustaulgic, and went straight into Suno's house.

"G-Goku? Is that you Goku? And you've brought friends! Oh I'm so happy to see you!" Android 8 cried as he hugged Goku.

"OHMYGOD! S...Son Goku!?" Suno asked, being afraid of embarressment if t wasn't him.

"YEAH! It is so good to see you 2! Suno, you're all grown up! And where are your-" Goku began to ask when he saw an old rinlky woman walk out of the kitchen. The woman dropped all the hot coco she was carrying in glasses on a plate, breaking the plate and all the glasses.

"Goku..." she started, her eyes watering.

"Woah! Are you Suno's mother!? You sure got ol-" Goku was interrupted by Gohan elbowing his shoulder.

"I meen...You haven't changed a bit!" Goku giggled.

"Listen, there's a high power level somewhere around here and we need to know who it belongs to!" Vegeta explained.

"Well we're no fighters--Accept for Eighter! Is he the pl?" Suno asked. Piccollo shook his head.

"No offense, but compared to us now, Eighter you're kinda...Weak" Piccollo explained.

"Oh, well Suno brought in another frozen person. A girl wearing strange clothes for this kinda weather. Maybe she's the one you're looking for," Suno's mother guessed. The Z-fighters went into a bedroom, where Sakura was sleeping, to investigate.

"Yep, she's the one alright" Krillen assured.

"I don't think she's like...Long term unconscious...I think she's just sleeping," Trunks proposed.

"Should we wake her up?" Goten asked.

"No, she needs her sleep. Let's ask her about her training when she wakes up," Goku said.

What is going on? Why are the Z-fighters encountering the leaf-ninja? Find out in the next chapter!

BTW, I'll be posting a map of this combined world later.

Super Cool

wow this is good so far but what about the Akatsuki?

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JC#1

I'll get to that, don't interrupt the mojo flow by askin' what happens next, LOL

ultra_blade

Ey, I just went through it real quick and, yeh I like your story line and all, but i found some thing that disturbed me in your writing

The sentence I just underlined is the one that has one of the major errors that I realized. You should of put it in like this:

What he didn't seem to know was that the chamber actually lead them to a different dimension.

Or something like that, I don't think you should use DBZ universe, and you also spelled universe wrong.

I think every writer agrees in this point with me, I think you should NEVER use short cut words like 2, r, u, etc...

This one has the exact same problem as the one above it, thats it for the mistakes.


Well I really like your stories and the way you put address your story line. I think you did a good job but yeh, we're not all perfect and we always make mistakes. Good Job and I cant wait till the next chapter

Dark Skywalker

now this is a good story the there are soooooo many fight posabilities for this

JC#1

2 as in glad to see 2 people not glad to see them as well as they are.
Well hanx for pointing out the "mistkes" (really only the fact that I spelled universe wrong) just keep going, you'll find REAL ones in the next chapter.

ultra_blade

I still think it should be spelled out the normal way "two" instead of "2", and "Power Level" instead of "PL". There were other minor spelling errors as well, but I don't care so long as I can understand them.=)

I know that I'm sounding annoying but you need to spend a bit more time before you post your fic's, theres no need for you to rush, take your time, spell check it, then proof read it. Don't worry too much about the fans, post it when you think its ready they'll enjoy it more.

I know it might be tough holding three fic's at a time maybe you should finish one then start on another no need to push yourself, that way you can have time for everything.=D

JC#1

Well whatever I hope it's no trouble but could you keep trying to find mistakes (please not every miner spelling istake but bigger ones and stuff that contradicts the Naruto and DBZ series) see I wanna be able to edit stuff when you point them out and then more people would read it knowing that the mistakes are at a minimum.
BTW, I'm kinda leaving the forums but I'm making 2 more threads (one about this crazy Valentine's day thing that happened and the other is my goodbye thread) and don't worry I'm still continueing my fanfics like once a week or maybe every 2 weeks see I kinda de-nerdified myself (read the valentine's thread that I'll make for details) and I think that if there is hope for me to not grow up as one of those people still playing video games in their 40s then I shouldn't be on a forum that is, no offense, mostly populated by nerds. So see ya and it might take a while to get back to the fanfics.
edit=BTW, I don't rush it, writing a chapter takes me like a whole day, only an hour or two to actually write it and a few more hours to proofread it and then I spend the rest of the day watching Naruto and DBZ to see if I messed anything up that would make it not fit in the storyline.

Dark Skywalker

continute..............................

JC#1

Just needed someone to post so I wouldn't have to double post. Uuuuuhhhh...Where was I? *reads over last chapter* Oh yeah, here it is!=

Chapter 2: sherlock Sakura

Naruto is at the front door of Goku's house. *knock, knock* Chi-chi opens the door.

"hello, can I help you?"

"Uhh, yeah, see I'm a ninja from the leaf village Konohagakure and--"

"WAIT WAIT WAIT! hold on a sec..." Chi-chi interupts, "1st of all I've never heard of Konohagakure, and secondly, a ninja? I think you're a little too old to be playing ninja--"

"Bt I'm not playing! I am a ninja! What, is that really uncommon here or something?" Naruto stole back the conversation.

"uuuhhh, kinda!" Chi-chi giggles.

"Well, have you seen a girl with pink hair looking kinda beat up come by here?" He questioned.

"uuummm...No, I don't think so, but I've been inside all day, and I have to get back to dinner or else it won't be ready by the time my son Goten gets back, bye now--" Chi-chi is interrupted by the sound of Naruto's stomach growling.

"*sigh* would you like to stay for dinner? Usually I make something out of what my family catches around the forest but today I went to the city and bought some stuff to make ramen," Chi-chi explained.

"Oh boy! Ramen!? I thought in a place without ninja there probably wouldn't be ramen or stuff from the current century," Naruto explains. He gets slaped across the face.

"WHERE DO YOU THINK THIS IS, THE DESSERT!? You ae just as bad as Goku!"

"So I guess that meens no ramen for me huh?"

"Nah, I'm used to this kinda thing," Chi-chi explained as her mood seemed to change entirely.

"she scarres me..." Naruto whispered.

Back at Jingle town, the room where Sakura, the Z-fighters, and Suno's family are in suddenly becomes filled with smoke.

"what the--" Goten begins, but he then faints. Only Vegeta, Sakura, Uub, Krillen, and Trunks are smart enough to hold their breath, while Goku, Hercule, Suno, Suno's parents, Goten, Piccollo, Tien, Yamcha, Pan(remember that this is in a world where GT didn't happen so Pan is still the same way she was at the end of DBZ), Gohan, Yajirobe, Oolong, Pu'ar, and Hercule fell unconscious. Majin Buu and Eighter weren't effected because of their unique resperatory systems. Everyone who didn't faint walked outside and saw people on the roof, wearing black cloaks with pink clouds on them.

"It's the Akatsuki!" Sakura screamed.

"The what?" Trunks asked.

"The Akatsuki. They are evil road ninja who...Well basicly they're bad guys, 'kay?" Sakura tried to explain.

"Oh, well whatever, that makes this simple rutine then," Trunks smirked.

Uub powers up and rushes towards the roof of the building.

"I've been wanting to test out my new abilities!" Uub said with a smile.

"huh? What jutsu is this? He's got some sort of aura surrounding him," Sakura questioned. A tall Akatsuki member swiped Uub away, as his short companion just stould there and laughed.

Vegeta quikly turned Super Saiyan, dissapeared, and reappeared infront of the tall one and punched him in the face. The tll guy stepped back a little. Vegeta didn't notice as the shorter one dropped to the ground on his hands and left foot, and used his right foot to trip Vegeta of the building. Vegeta regained control of himself and landed on his feet next to Trunks. Trunks started whispering in his ear.

"I know you love to fight and win, so that's why you and me will be fighting, while Uub gets everyone out of the house and to safety, okay?"

Trunks and Vegeta burst upward towards the two antagonists, Trunks turning Super Saiyan along the way.

"What jutsu are they using? I can't feel any chakra from them! Everyone is supposed to have chakra and if they can do all this then they must be using a lot of it! Hold on...If our worlds collided then that meens that they are from a different world where chakra is replaced with a different energy! No...No I can still feel energy from them, not replacing the chakra...Because the chakra is still there! I feel it now, but somehow this strange energy is so powerfull, that it was blocking the connction between me and their chakra! But now I feel it..And I feel this other energy too! The strangest part is that, unlike chakra, everyone seems to have a different amount of this energy! I can feel it inside me now too...I guess iit was always there but I just never noticed it before..."Sakura explained to herself.

Suddenly Sakura was shocked to see Vegeta punching the tall Akatsuki member right infront of her face, and then dissapearing and reappearing to kick eachother in the faces on top of the building.

"Strange jutsu...How did you make us transport so quikly like that?" the tall one asked Vegeta.

"What the heck's a jutsu?" Vegeta said as he flew backwards from the fight scene. He put his hands together with his palms facing he tall antagonist, and yelled "FINAL FLASH!" as he saw Uub carry the last of the people from the building. A short distance away, Buu turned to liquid form and covered the short guy. Trunks, knowing that his opponent would be unable to dodge it, yelled "Burning attack!" as he used one hand to shoot the pink globb with a firey blast. Vegeta's final flash then hit his own opponent, together with Trunks' blast causing a gigantic cloud of smoke to engulf the scene.

Did eather both or none of these blasts work against the Akatsuki? Is Sakura's explaination of this strange energy correct? This and more in the next installment, in one week...I think about a week...

Dark Skywalker

good job i like it

Nikushimi

Everyone is totally out of character.

Description is lacking.

You didn't describe the Akatsuki very well, and I sincerely hope that's not Itachi and Kisame, because you seem to have totally messed-up their personalities.

Akatsuki cloaks have red clouds, not pink clouds. =/

A punch to the face from Super Saiyan Vegeta=death for ANY Akatsuki member.

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Bow to the King.

JC#1

meeny! Just kidding, I enjoy having both good and bad opinions so hat I know what to correct. Well I really did think those clouds were pink, but I see it now. About the punch=death thing, well they are from 2 different worlds where in one, Vegeta's punch to the face of someone who had the power level of an Akatsuki would meen death, while something might be different for the laws of physics in Naruto's world. I don't know how different laws of physics would mix-up exactly, so I'm just making stuff up for now. And to be completely honest, I don't know what Akatsuki members they are! I never actually heard who each guy was, so I just pictured a tall guy and a short guy and thought "I'll figure it out later" and because of that I had to make sure I didn't show ANY personality or else they might seem like a specific guy and then I might make them a different guy and people would say "that's not his personality" I'll try fixing all this later, so please don't make this seem like too bad of a fic for now. It will probably get a lot better once I watch more Naruto and fix all these mistakes. And could you be more specific of who's out of character (well, everyone but how?) and I'll try to get more description into the next chapter and I'll edit some parts of this one to.

Dark Skywalker

who need to get garra, kakashi and sasuke in there that would make it even better with chidori vs kamhameha wave that would rock

JC#1

sssshhh Don't spoil it! Shouldn't it have been obvious that they would appear eventually?