Fred

Wow...Niku being a dick actually helped someone's life. The second attempt wasn't bad. And you don't have to post everything the second you right it, save it on your computer, and keep writing when you have time and inspiration. Then, when it's of an adequate length(before it hits tl;dr), spell check it, and post it.

Oop, my bad, was miles away on page one. I'll give an adequate comment in a sec.

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Nikushimi

"A sec" is stoner for "a few hours".

Anyways, dude, SSJJason, chapters should be at least 700 words- and even that's very short. Otherwise they're more like paragraphs.

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I keep them short but not too short ....700 words is alot.
This fic is ending very soon. Not that soon but soon

Thats how much words harry poter books have. Reason number 1 i never bother to read them.

Ill write it long but with the fustration of thinking the shit up makes my hands go messed up so i misspell, and the time i get it posted my hands fucking hurt so i dont change it intill the next day. Or the next day. Or the next day. Or the next day.

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Chapter 5: the mastermind part 1

It was prank day at Bellwood middle school and water ballons were dropping everywhere. " Hey danielle , what's up? Devin asked with a squiter in the back of his hand
" Devin you really think im that stupid? Give me that squiter! Danielle dived at devin and made him slip on the water his squrtier dropped making him crack his head.
Daneille laughed " What's wrong devin? Need ideas for good- Her sentence was interrupted by a water ballon thrown by Ken and a other kid.
" Oh man...she's gonna punch the crap out of us! The kid said
"Us? We made a deal....if you helped me get her then you could ask her out. Remember that? I 'm not reponsible for this anymore. Ken said
" Oh yeah...whatever! the kid smirked
" Oh yeah? Ok fine the deal is off you nerd! You'll think twice about tricking someone again trust me. Ken eyed his watch
" Yeah? What are you gonna do about it? Do your little girly slaps on me?
the kid was laughing hard on his back
Danielle came out of know where and punched him in the face " Dont worry. I'm pretty forgiving on prank day.
" Oh is that so? Well thanks anyway. Ken eyed her
What they didnt realize was that the whole seventh grade was watching them " flirt" near the statue of the finder of the school
When they saw the seventh graders they blushed so red it looked like they put there faces in hot water
Click! A photo flash went
" HA ha gotcha! Now to put this up in the schools year book!
the kid laughed but then smirked as he walked away.
" That little twerp! Danielle said
" How was that dude anyway said Devin with a Humangous bandade on his forehead
" Don't know....that kid looked like me though...wait a second....not like me my father ....which means... Ken paused in between really thinking
" That's ....Negitavie 10! Danielle and Ken shouted
When it was the 4th period , the fire alarm rung but the hallways were burned and too hot.
Daneille and ken were in the bathroom at the time and when they sensed the heat they transformed
Danielle and ken met up in alien form and made a plan...
" Hmm...one of us will have to evaclute the school and the other will face negiative 10. We meet up outside. Said fang -fang
" Ill face my fathers old nemises said cloner
" Ok then we meet up outside and try not to get hurt . fang fang said
"Got it....cloner and fang fang splitted ways and Cloner followed the paths of fire ( on the walls) to negitive 10.
The "kid " came out and looked at his watch and turned " hero"
" Ha HA HA !! said fourarms
" fourarms? Hm...bad luck for me but .... i have to win ! cloner cloned himself and lanuched at the pole swinging around and then kicking fourarms .
Meanwhille , Fang-fang rushed the building out side and waited for the fire trucks to come
" where are they? she tapped her foot

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