RandomPenguin

well i started this last year but never got past the 6th episode/chapter but i stumbled across these today with some help (thanks BI) and i decided to continue the comic (mainly because im bored) also for this comic i will be giving a special thanks to Zer0 who when i first made the comic was the only one that actually bothered to comment on it. i don't know if anyone else saw it.


























Well that is all of the original chapters/episodes so now i will go and write up more for you guys to read... (bare in mind i did these a year ago people lol)

Watch this Space

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burningvegeta

Impressive, comic sprites I like I like. I'm in that kind of work. The way you executed your sprites in comic form was very good and impressed me overall more than anything else. I use to use those sprites myself, you manipulated them nicely. It was great from beginning to end.

Though I think it could have been tidied up for greater detail and enhancing it performance wise. I would like to see plenty more though dude, as they were pretty awesome.

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RandomPenguin

cheers well like i said i did them a year ago and as i was going through them before i posted i did see a lack of detail which i hope i can increase from now on thanks for feedback

edit

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The Electron Zone

Nice........very intriguing

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RandomPenguin

well if you didn't see chapters 1-6 then thier visible now (because ace retiring community boards made them dissapear.)

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burningvegeta

Awesome dude.......the quality is much better now. You show skill in designing and creating custom sprites.

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RandomPenguin

here is chapter 8 and BurningVegeta your character is in it... =) sorry for it being short but i hope the monologue will compensate

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burningvegeta

Kran : Eis Krieger is reborn! I really like how you handled my character, I can't really give any criticisms as I like it a lot. The use of more text was good, better than the earlier comics as you had to read a lot more into it to understand what was going on so thats a win. Thanks for including me btw dude.

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RandomPenguin

no problems Chapter 9 doesn't include as much text because it's more battle oriantated. but it is still good in my opinion.




that's all for today because im half dead with tiredness but tommorow i promise a very big chapter as number 10 promises to be huge. =)

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burningvegeta

I can see this one day there all training and they think there all friends then pwn'd, Son Goku gets owned in his sleep. Nice, all good I really want these animated. Though don't get me wrong there good, continue the next chapter soon. To attract more attention you want to ask a Moderator to move this thread to the art section, even though Comics are classed as a form of writing. Thats were I would put mine if I did them anyway.

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RandomPenguin

okay then to the art section it is

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Zer0

I don't know why but I lol'd when Bejita died. "I'll beat you easily.", four panels later *is dead*.

Good job on the sprites. I remember the old thread but I have no idea what I posted then. Keep up the good work.

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RandomPenguin

it was mostly motivational stuff... so yeah anyway i guess im really gonna go to sleep now and thanks for the comments on my comic.

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ANB

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It's pretty generic plot-wise. You should also make more creative backgrounds. You do have a very good intuition in that you position the sprites so it looks like an actual fight (and not a clunky mess of kilobytes). Action had good flow and your usage and positioning of chi-blasts were nothing short of 1337.

Err...6.25/10. I've seen better, but you have potential. And I have done things like this myself, but I don't want to get back into it (I was Son Goharrato's apprentice).

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Luke Groundwalker

There's a couple of things wrong with these comics coming from an experienced sprite comicer:
1. It's trying to be serious
2. No backgrounds, and panels aren't aligned properly
3. No use of good grammar and spelling (of course, it doesn't have to be if it's part of the joke or something)
4. Action scenes have potential and can be pulled off extremely well in sprite comics, but there's a lack of actual focus on each of the attacks that would make such things more entertaining

For pros, though?
-Uses the best kind of Dragonball Z sprites (like seriously, Dragonball Z sprites tend to look like shit)
-As said action scenes have potential

Yeah, that about covers it.

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