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Old 05-15-2008   #1 (permalink)
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This is my first fan fiction of DBZ so here it is.

200 years later from the present in a defferent universe then the ones we already know a kid with silver like spiky hair and a purple cape around the rest of his body walked sadly all the buildings were destroyed and people were killed. "They did it they won." He quietly mumbled to himself
"I promised my friends I wasn't gonna let them down."
"And now I see there dead faces."
Gohan layed flat on the ground when the kid heard a a tree branch fall he saw a shadowy figure!
"I gotta run!"
Instantly the figure popped out!
"Go away android 3.06" The boy screamed
"To late!"Yelled android 3.06
Right when the boy was about to die Gohan jumped up and kicked 3.06 in the face! "I thought you were-"
"Wrong."Gohan said.
Suddenly Gohan heard a crack and fell! 'N...N...O...N..O...NO!"The boy yelled!
"Die!" 3.06 screamed!


Far from that universe another universe had 3 more androids.
This was Trunk's universe.
"Come on give it your best i'll never die!" said a voice
"Are you sure you'll never die?" asked one of the androids sarcasticly.
"Positive!" said the voice
It was Trunks talking.
"Finish Buster!" Trunks yelled!
But the attack flew back to Trunks!
POW.....BAM!
Trunks fell!
Someone walked up.
"Trunks you did well." said a man or Nemekian!
The Nemekian picked up Trunks and set him beside Gohan.
This Nemekian's name is Yukotor.
"Yukotor your going to fight them!?" said Gohan
"Yup."
"Crawling lightning!" Yelled Yukotor!



This attack was known for it's lightning that crawls under the opponents feet
But the attack crashed into Gohan cause the person closest to the lightning gets hurt Gohan was closest.
Now the fight got serious!

POW BAM POW BAM SHROOSH!
"Ugh" Yukotor fell!
Close combat is bad far combat is good thought Gohan.
"Masenko!"
To bad nothing happened.
There was no scratch on even 1 of the androids!

Well thats all the next one will be tommorow most likely

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fanfics don't go here, they go in the fanfic section. I'd say that personally (being your brother), but then nobody would know that I already told you and they'd be yelling at you. Don't get me into trouble, people only know you now as JC's little brother so do stupid things and they'll blame me.
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Meh, needs some gramatical work
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That's a weird number for an android. Doesn't sound convincing when a character yells Android 3.06! When I say it in my head it always comes out funny.
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How about the Android be 22?
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Um maybe I kinda come up with weird names.
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Okay next uh.. chapter!
The part where I said uh I meant hmm episode or chapter until I thought episode doesn't make sence cause its not a animation.
So here it is! And I will call android 3.06 android 22

So I will start where I stopped.
Sh*t Gohan died!
How he died you ask the same way in the first said universe.
In Trunk's universe:
"Die!" yelled a voice.
Pan arrived!
"Holy Cr*p"
"Bye Bye" said a voice heard before....Super Buu!
Pan fell to her knees coughing blood after being punched in the stomach!
In the first said universe:
The silver spiky haired kid sat down in a roof broken house.
"That was a close one." he sadly said to himself.
What happened you ask android 22 vanished gone but not for long a hand came out of the ground android 22!
the kids heart beat like crazy.
The kid's name: Eon.
Eon jumped on the hand but nothing happened.
Of course Eon tripped and fell.
In the original universe present!:
"SS1 2 3 4!" A voice called
"SS....Fi....Five" breathlessly said by ..G..Go..Goku!

Bye sorry me and my brother have dumb time limits on this computer so it couldn't have been a long story short well bye!
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no i believe he does so umm yeah... good try at a fic you wil improve greatly
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Sorry this fan fic kinda sucks.
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I think I should instead tell you my super heros I made up Fight! Random.
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You can only post once per thread. And, may I ask, how old are you?
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Very good story my friend, I enjoyed it alot.
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He's 13
edit=wtf, is my other post deleted?

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