DBZ Af episode 1 The newest warriors - Page 2

ultra_blade · 04-15-2008

It would help if you don't have your font in Bold and if you space it out some, but like this I doubt I'll read it.

SSJJason · 04-15-2008

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Originally Posted by ultra_blade

It would help if you don't have your font in Bold and if you space it out some, but like this I doubt I'll read it.

Then could you just at least look at it?

ultra_blade · 04-18-2008

Hmmm... I read the first chapter and I liked it it could use a bit more detail and all but if you have it so squished up like this it'll be really annoying and since you have it on Bold it's gonna be even more of a drag.

I think you should start it fresh and add some description and detail to your story, space it out and don't use Bold Letters. Or you can just do that from your next chapter and on. =]

~~Dark Skywalker~~ · 04-18-2008

This still could use some work

04-15-2008	#16 (permalink)
ultra_blade (10) Saiyan Elite Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Melbourne, Australia Posts: 141 Rep Power: 1	Re: DBZ Af episode 1 The newest warriors It would help if you don't have your font in Bold and if you space it out some, but like this I doubt I'll read it.

04-18-2008	#18 (permalink)
ultra_blade (10) Saiyan Elite Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Melbourne, Australia Posts: 141 Rep Power: 1	Re: DBZ Af episode 1 The newest warriors Hmmm... I read the first chapter and I liked it it could use a bit more detail and all but if you have it so squished up like this it'll be really annoying and since you have it on Bold it's gonna be even more of a drag. I think you should start it fresh and add some description and detail to your story, space it out and don't use Bold Letters. Or you can just do that from your next chapter and on. =]

04-18-2008	#19 (permalink)
~~Dark Skywalker~~ Banned Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: New York Chillin Like A villain Posts: 1,503 Rep Power: 0	Re: DBZ Af episode 1 The newest warriors This still could use some work