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~~Dark Skywalker~~ · 03-17-2008

Reading..........Hmph...............Training...... ..........Hmph

~~JC#1~~ · 03-17-2008

uuuuuhhh..........hmph..........good or bad? anyway, here goes the next chapter!

Chapter 4: Sakura VS Kisame: Bushy Brows and Uub to the rescue!

Sakura is standing on the roof of Suno's house, and Kisame is on the snow-covered ground below her. Suddenly, Uub dashes out from the building, holding Goku in his arms.

"Trunks, Vegeta! This is the last--! Oh my god..." Uub is shocked at the view of Vegeta in a fetal position on the floor, and Trunks unconscious next to him.

"Hmpf...This should be easy, but I'd like to kno what you've done to my partner...Where is Itachi? I doubt you were strong enough to defeat him...He's got to be alive somewhere," Kisame questioned.

What do I do? If only Naruto and the others were here, we would stand a chance! Sakura said to herself.

edit=hit, I accidently pressed the submit button before I finished! Here's the rest=

"Fine, I'll just beat the answer out of you!" Kisame yelled, "You don't stand a chance with this new juts--" suddenly he was interrupted by Vegeta's foot smashing its way into the back of his head.

NO! I can't just sit here in fear anymore while these guys fight my battle! Sakura convinced herself, I have to defeat him myself!

"HEY! Back off of him, it's my turn now!" Sakura yelled as she jumped down from the roof of Suno's house to land her feet on the soft snow. She dashed towards the tiny warriror and thrusted her clenched fist into her enamy's gut with great force, only to have the antagonist seemingly melt into water in her hand. "A water clone!" Suddenly she felt a large force strike her back, plowing her body into a stack of snow.

"Looks like I have no choice...I'm gonig to have to steal this one from Naruto...It was once his ultimate move...And for a girl, it won't even take any chakra," she convinced herself.

"SEXY JUTSU!" she yelled as she jumped out of the snow, completely naked, with only snow covering her privates.

"WHAT ARE YOU DOING!?!" Uub, Kisame, Vegreta, and Trunks all yelled at once. While Kisame was distracted, Uub notioced Sakura signalling to him by twitching her head torwards Kisame.

OH! I get it! Uub realized. Quikly, he fixed his eyes on Kisame's back and blasted him with full power, completely obliterateing him. However, when the smoke cleared, a puddle was found, freezing into ice on the snow. "What? He's...Water?"

"Its a water clone! He's still alive somewhere!" Sakura explained. She then realized that Vegeta and Trunks were staring directly at her. "OH COME ON! WHY ARE MEN SUCH PERVERTS! I HAD NO CHOICE, HE WOULDA TOTALLY KILLED ME!" she yelled at the two saiyans. She found her clothes in the snow and started to get dressed.

"Hey! Son, do you sense that?" Vegeta asked Trunks.

"Yeah...He's here...And so is someone else..." Trunks replied.

"Its...Its Lee! Its Rock Lee!" Sakura yelled. Suddenly, Kisame and Lee were notcide on the roof of the house, their hands locked together and their knees clashing against eachother.

so, sorry I don't have some really cool concluding narrative, but see ya next time!

~~Dark Skywalker~~ · 03-18-2008

not too good? everyone is out of character

~~JC#1~~ · 03-18-2008

couldn't you say that more suttle? Please give me an example of someone doing something that the character wouldn't normally do, then maybe I can fix it.

**JAIF** · 03-23-2008

Sorry, but, I'm going to delete some of your posts here. This isn't the Gas Chamber section, so spam isn't allowed here. Please keep posting to commenting on the story only.

On a more-related issue, I read through your fanfic JC and I found it rather enjoyable. Add more to the description and length, fix the grammar / punctuation / syntax errors, and add a wider range of vocabulary, and you're good to go. Shouldn't be too hard.

~~Dark Skywalker~~ · 03-23-2008

Then Could You Please Continue The story

Madness · 03-24-2008

Vegeta wouldn't stare at Sakura. Vegeta isn't a pervert.

ultra_blade · 03-24-2008

I told you Sakura was useless!!! And she could of easily used henge instead going out naked in front of men... she's retarded and her brain is tiny!!!

~~Dark Skywalker~~ · 03-25-2008

Quote:

Originally Posted by ultra_blade

I told you Sakura was useless!!! And she could of easily used henge instead going out naked in front of men... she's retarded and her brain is tiny!!!

sakura is awesome

~~JC#1~~ · 03-25-2008

Quote:

Originally Posted by Madness

Vegeta wouldn't stare at Sakura. Vegeta isn't a pervert.

you don't have to really be a pervert to stare when a girl takes off her clothes....Its just natural...
Ultra_Blade, I don't really know what henge is...

Jay Halsey · 03-25-2008

I love DBGT!!!

ultra_blade · 03-25-2008

Henge means transform. you knw wen they transform

~~Dark Skywalker~~ · 03-25-2008

Continue the story

~~JC#1~~ · 03-26-2008

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jay Halsey

I love DBGT!!!

So do I, but that was kind of random.

Quote:

Originally Posted by ultra_blade

Henge means transform. you knw wen they transform

When have they ever transformed? Sorry, I've only seen the first Naruto show and then the first episode of Shipuuden. I usually only watch the american releases, but I watched the first ep of Shipuuden and the final episodes (you know, the anime filler arcs) of Narutop on youtube in japanese with eng subs for this fic.

~~Dark Skywalker~~ · 03-26-2008

Continue the story please

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~~JC#1~~ Banned Join Date: Jan 2008 Posts: 1,806 Rep Power: 0	Re: Worlds collide!Naruto meets Dragonballz! uuuuuhhh..........hmph..........good or bad? anyway, here goes the next chapter! Chapter 4: Sakura VS Kisame: Bushy Brows and Uub to the rescue! Sakura is standing on the roof of Suno's house, and Kisame is on the snow-covered ground below her. Suddenly, Uub dashes out from the building, holding Goku in his arms. "Trunks, Vegeta! This is the last--! Oh my god..." Uub is shocked at the view of Vegeta in a fetal position on the floor, and Trunks unconscious next to him. "Hmpf...This should be easy, but I'd like to kno what you've done to my partner...Where is Itachi? I doubt you were strong enough to defeat him...He's got to be alive somewhere," Kisame questioned. What do I do? If only Naruto and the others were here, we would stand a chance! Sakura said to herself. edit=hit, I accidently pressed the submit button before I finished! Here's the rest= "Fine, I'll just beat the answer out of you!" Kisame yelled, "You don't stand a chance with this new juts--" suddenly he was interrupted by Vegeta's foot smashing its way into the back of his head. NO! I can't just sit here in fear anymore while these guys fight my battle! Sakura convinced herself, I have to defeat him myself! "HEY! Back off of him, it's my turn now!" Sakura yelled as she jumped down from the roof of Suno's house to land her feet on the soft snow. She dashed towards the tiny warriror and thrusted her clenched fist into her enamy's gut with great force, only to have the antagonist seemingly melt into water in her hand. "A water clone!" Suddenly she felt a large force strike her back, plowing her body into a stack of snow. "Looks like I have no choice...I'm gonig to have to steal this one from Naruto...It was once his ultimate move...And for a girl, it won't even take any chakra," she convinced herself. "SEXY JUTSU!" she yelled as she jumped out of the snow, completely naked, with only snow covering her privates. "WHAT ARE YOU DOING!?!" Uub, Kisame, Vegreta, and Trunks all yelled at once. While Kisame was distracted, Uub notioced Sakura signalling to him by twitching her head torwards Kisame. OH! I get it! Uub realized. Quikly, he fixed his eyes on Kisame's back and blasted him with full power, completely obliterateing him. However, when the smoke cleared, a puddle was found, freezing into ice on the snow. "What? He's...Water?" "Its a water clone! He's still alive somewhere!" Sakura explained. She then realized that Vegeta and Trunks were staring directly at her. "OH COME ON! WHY ARE MEN SUCH PERVERTS! I HAD NO CHOICE, HE WOULDA TOTALLY KILLED ME!" she yelled at the two saiyans. She found her clothes in the snow and started to get dressed. "Hey! Son, do you sense that?" Vegeta asked Trunks. "Yeah...He's here...And so is someone else..." Trunks replied. "Its...Its Lee! Its Rock Lee!" Sakura yelled. Suddenly, Kisame and Lee were notcide on the roof of the house, their hands locked together and their knees clashing against eachother. so, sorry I don't have some really cool concluding narrative, but see ya next time!

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