Dragon Ball Z (2)

[Gosan]

Hello, this is my first fan fiction so I do hope you enjoy reading my episodes that start from the end of Dragon Ball Z. This is optional, if you don't mind, you may do the following

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DRAGON BALL Z (2)UUB SAGAEPISODE #1- Uub's Training

BACKGROUND MUSIC - FIRST FLIGHT

“Goku, where are we going?” Uub asked as he grabbed onto Goku’s shoulders a bit harder, he certainly wasn’t used to being up so high. He closed his eyes shut in case he looked down by accident.

Things were happening too fast for Uub. First he entered the World Martial Arts Tournament to win the prize money for his village, his opponent being Goku who got him angry by insulting his parents. This had unleashed his hidden potential he didn’t know he had. After agreeing to be trained by Goku, Uub grabbed hold of his shoulders and Goku flew off, saying another goodbye to his family and friends.

“I’m going to talk you somewhere to train” Goku replied as he gathered up speed at a slow pace Goku looked back to make sure Uub doesn’t fall off, he couldn’t fly after all.

“But what about my village and family?” Uub said worriedly “I need some money to help them”. He didn’t think just going off to train could help them. The village needed him, especially as he was the only one capable to bringing them food supplies.

“Don’t worry, Hercule will sponsor your village and family, he’s got heaps of money” Goku assured Uub with a laugh. Hercule may not be the strongest in reality but he was defiantly had a lot of spare money, Goku already told him to do this as a favour for letting him win the tournament once again.

“Oh, that’s good” said a relieved Uub. He now was more relaxed since everything was under control; he was almost panicking there for a moment. ”Where exactly is this place you are taking me?” Goku just had a bright idea and gradually stopped.

“Actually Uub, we have a slight change of plans. I decided to go to Korin tower since I have something very important to do there. Do you mind if you stay there a while before training?” Goku asked,

“No, I don’t…ARGH !!!!” Uub screamed, Goku at that instant blasted off with so much force that Uub had no choice but to releasee his grip of his left hand and was left dangling with his right. “GOKU, SLOW DOWN !!!” he pleaded but Goku could not hear him, as the wind was so strong it blocked out his voice. His remaining hand began to sweat and it losing control as his fingers became slippery against Goku’s blue gi.

“Huh? Woops, sorry Uub” Goku said apologetically, grabbing Uub’s arm that had just and putting himself on his back. Goku continued to fly towards a tower as Uub clutched Goku’s gi now harder than ever.

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BACGROUND MUSIC - KORIN TOWER

“Hey, we’re here”. Goku called as he and Uub then landed on Korin tower where Korin himself greeted him.

“Hello Goku, long time no see. What have you been doing these last 10 years?” Korin asked. The wise old cat hasn’t changed a bit in since Goku first met him when he was young, let alone 10 years.

“It’s a long story Korin” Goku said quickly “You got anything to eat? I’m starving"-CRASH-Korin and Uub both collapsed at the sound of the word 'eat'.

“As you wish Goku” Korin said with a sigh. "By the way, who might be the young boy who was on your back?” Korin asked, he looked towards Uub who was standing there quietly next to Goku.

“Oh, his name is Uub; he’s got a lot of potential so I’m going to train him myself. He may even become stronger than me one day” Goku replied. He then used his telepathy skills to add “he’s the reincarnation of Majin Buu with a pure heart but don’t tell him yet”.

“I see, Uub please make yourself at home” Korin said, Uub smiled in politeness but he really didn’t think a place like this would be called a home.

“Thank you very much Korin” Uub replied, he turned to Goku with an awkward expression on his face. "Goku, was this your important reason to come here? You were hungry?” He asked. He couldn’t believe he was asking such a question.

“A true warrior needs a full stomach Uub, care to join me?” Goku said as he spotted Korin coming out with the food and licked his lips.

“It’s all right Goku, I’m not hungry at the moment” Uub said. He had lost his will to eat after the experience with flying just earlier.

“Suit yourself, Wow, this is great Korin” Goku complimented as the food was laid in front of him.

Goku stared at the food in front of him as his mouth watered in hunger. Without wasting a second he started consuming the wide variety of food. In less than a minute, Goku had eaten more than half of what was there. After another 40 seconds he had finished the 30 dishes of food. Uub eyes popped out, he couldn’t believe that someone like Goku would be able to eat that much, let alone that much in less than 2 minutes.

“Uub, time to go, hop on” Goku said standing up, going to the edge of the tower kneeling, Uub jumped onto Goku, ready to grab his clothes but suddenly -CRASH-Goku stood right up and turned to face Korin in an instant, causing Uub to fall face flat on the ground

“Hey Korin, you got any more Sensu Beans?” Goku asked

"What? You expect us to still have Sensu Beans after ten years?” said a familiar voice. The owner of that voice as immediately clear to Goku once he heard it.

“Hey Yajirobe, nice to see you again” Goku said as Yajirobe emerged with his arms folded, he was a fat as ever.

“Not at the moment, I never thought you would need them at this time of peace” Korin replied giving Yajirobe a look.

“Oh okay, see you around you guys” Goku said and farewelled his friends. Goku then grabbed Uub, put him on his back and they flew off again into the blue skies.

“Goku, what are Sensu Beans?” Uub asked, he had no idea what they were talking about.

“They are special beans that Korin grows in his tower. When you eat it, you will be fully healed and a get a power up in the process. It’s good to use when you need to recover quickly from a fight” Goku explained, “This looks like a good training ground”. They landed on a desert plain; Uub got of Goku’s back a waited for his next words.

“All right Uub, lets start training” Goku announced, “first I’ll teach you the basics”

So Goku, the strongest being in the universe by far teaches his first student. After about a year of training, Goku had taught Uub how to fly and use a variety of techniques. This included the Instant Transmission, Turtle Blaster Wave, Solar Flare, Tri Form and Spirit Bomb. He had also taught Uub about Saiyan transformations and how to sense people’s energy. Uub now surpassed the level of strength that Kid Buu once had, Goku was very much impressed in the work he had done with Uub.

BACKGROUND MUSIC - GOKU VS UUB

”KA…ME…” Uub said as he pushed his cupped hands behind him and bent his knees. A glow of blue energy began to grow as he said the next words. “HA…ME…” Uub continued. The energy ball was now a size of a basketball and growing continuously. He put more energy into his attack as he tensed himself up. “HA!!!” He screamed and thrust his cupped hands forward into the sky.

His teacher Goku was waiting patiently above him, performing an identical technique.-BOOM-The two blue waves connected with each other after impact. The energy produced began to expand in all directions as both warriors pushed more energy into the attacks. Uub’s hands were shaking with the force and realised in a matter of seconds he would loose the power struggle. There was only one way out and the time to do it was now before it’s too late.

Uub pushed his hands forward and then disappeared from sight. In an instant he had reappeared behind Goku who was still distracted by the wave that now hit the ground. The wave Goku was still pushing energy into disappeared straight away as the Saiyan realised but it was too late. –WHAM-Uub swung his foot right at Goku’s back sending the Saiyan plunging into the desert floor, a small crater created from the explosion that was heard.

Goku came out of the dust unharmed; he clenched his fists as his white aura now turned golden as well as his hair and eyebrows. He eyes had also turned green; the dust was blown outward as Goku charged at his student who was awaiting the next assault from above. The Saiyan threw a flurry of punches and kicks as he reached Uub but the human blocked all his attacks with ease. –POW- Uub countered with a single punch that had Goku grasping his chest. With the Super Saiyan being now immobilised, Uub took hold of his legs and spun him around multiple times before releasing him towards the ground. -BOOM-

“You had enough yet Goku?” Uub taunted. “Because I’m just warming up”. There was no answer; only the dust flowing in the wind could be heard. -POOF- Goku blasted from the earth now no longer a Super Saiyan. The electricity began to blend with his aura as the Earth bred Saiyan rushed at Uub while firing small energy blasts with his hands. Uub simply deflected the balls of energy back at Goku with a swift movement of his own hands. As the energy reached Goku, he vanished into thin air. Uub looked around in astonishment, as he could no longer sense his energy signal. -BAM- Goku then appeared with his foot implanted at the side of Uub’s neck. The human flew back from kick and clenched his fists as his hair stood up from the aura. Uub now no longer holding back began to throw punches at the speed of light, his face full of determination. Goku quickly went into a defensive position and blocked most of the attacks but later could no longer keep up with the increasing rate fo the attacks. –CRACK- Uub then thrust his fist right at Goku’s nose, he clutched it as it began to bleed. Uub retreated some distance and charged at Goku as the Saiyan looked back. Uub grabbed onto him and spun as they went towards the ground. –CRASH-Uub let go just as Goku hit and took a couple of steps back as his teacher emerged from the smoke and dust.

”You have improved greatly Uub since we first met and I am proud of you as a teacher” Goku said as he reverted back to his base form. “But can you handle my true power?” Uub flew a fair distance away from him and braced himself as Goku began to power up

“HAAA !!!” He cried, the earth began to shake with the power. Nearby rocks started levitating around the Earth’s protector as his hair and turned gold once again. A great flash of golden light engulfed Goku and began to grow brighter and brighter..-FLASH- Uub crossed his hands to cover his eyes as Goku glowed in extreme brightness. Once Uub opened his eyes, Goku had completely changed in appearance. The Saiyan’s hair had grown a long length as well as missing eyebrows. His aura expanded immensely with the electricity now crackling more than ever. Goku knew that he to this day had not fully mastered Super Saiyan 3, he was still having trouble with the power usage. But none the less he was better off then he was when fighting Buu.

Uub not wanting Goku to come to him this time went speeding to the Saiyan, his fist outstretched, glowing with white energy. He threw the powerful charged punch at the Saiyan who stood motionless. Goku simply held up his hand and clutched the incoming fist to Uub’s amazement. –SMASH-.Uub’s eyes went wide as Goku plunged his own fist into Uub’s stomach. The warrior grabbed Uub by the arm and swung him skyward, sending rapid energy blasts after him. Uub quickly curled himself into a ball as the blasts neared him. A sliver shield surrounded Uub as the energy hit the barrier, protecting him from harm. Goku by this time had teleported behind Uub. He lifted his leg as his foot began to glow a bright gold. -BAM- Goku pushed his leg down sending him towards the ground. Goku reappeared, feet on the ground and charged a punch. -WHAM- Uub’s body hunched on impact as the pain seared through his body. -BAM-Uub was sent up towards the blue skies as Goku delivered another blow to the stomach. Uub continued to go higher, still dazed from the last attacks and then halted in the air. –BASH–Goku’s fist came out behind him and connected with Uub’s skull. –BOOM- The pain reached Uub again as he was sent crashing into the ground. There was silence and then a voice out of the smoke arised.

“KI CANNON !!!!” he announced as he pushed his head forward. -BANG- Goku then felt the impact of an invisible force as Uub quickly flew behind Goku and then grabbed his long golden hair and spun him around –WHAM- bringing Goku back to him only to meet his fist. -WHAM- -CRACK- -WHAM- -CRACK-He did this repeatedly until "ARGH !!!" Goku screamed in agony. His aura grew so fast that it produced a force that knocked Uub back, releasing is grip on the hair. The two backed away from each other, locking eyes for a moment, Goku then put his hands in a cupped position. Uub, seeing this did the same.

“KAMEHAMEHA !!!!” Goku cried as he pushed his hands forward, the beam of energy dawning towards Uub. “KAMEHAMEHA !!!!” Uub cried in response as he saw it coming. -CLASH- The two waves collided once more and expanded into a huge ball of energy. This time round Uub put a lot more energy into it as well as Goku. Gradually Uub’s beam began to overlap Goku’s as he pushed more of the force into it. He pushed his hands forward, continuing the process.

“HAAA !!!!!” Goku cried as he pushed a great amount of energy all at once. This caught Uub by surprise, causing him to fall back from the shock impact from Saiyan. –BANG- The beam hit Uub right on. Goku looked as the smoke cleared and saw that top of Uub’s gi was now completely destroyed. Goku didn’t’ know that Uub had used all his energy and assumed he could continue floating in the air. But suddenly Uub began to fall at a frightening speed. Goku quickly teleported below and caught him in his arms. The Saiyan then flew towards a nearby grassy area and landed with a small thud.

“You did well Uub, you did well” Goku said proudly as he placed Uub on grass to rest.

*******

When Uub opened his eyes, he could see nothing but darkness. “Where am I? Why can’t I see anything?” He asked himself in a panicky voice “I haven’t gone blind have I?”

Goku fights Uub the good formation of Buu in the recent tournament and puts him under his wing as his first student. After Uub decides Goku makes a visit to Korin’s Tower where he fills his hungry stomach and later trains Uub for approximately a year. After an intense training session in a form of an all out duel between him and his teacher, Uub is knocked unconscious and wakes up to the dark. Where is Uub? And why can’t he see? Will the darkness never see light? Find out on the next exciting episode of Dragon Ball Z.

Goku: 160 000 000
Super Saiyan Goku: 380 000 000
Super Saiyan 2 Goku: 720 000 000
Super Saiyan 3 Goku: 900 000 000

Uub: 750 000 000

[.Osmond_Fan]

This fic is great, keep it up. + Excellent for a first try...
But try to improve your spelling.

[Gosan]

Thanks a lot, I really appreciate it. Spelling? I have checked it in word before I posted this. Maybe spell check wasn't on. Regardless, I will improve my spelling in future.

[.Byakuya]

this is some preety good stuff you got going here,i like your description of the fight scenes

[..::Bardock::.]

Holy s**t. This is better than Hell's Revenge. Good work, I applaud you.

10/10

[.Ghost Outlaw]

D@mn this is cool...keep it coming.

9.5/10

[.Son-Gina]

Really good I cany wait to see what happens next ^-^

9.5/10

[Razz]

i like it. When Goku and Uub arrived at korins i tought he should have ate a senzu bean. but then when Korin said he didnt grow any then it made sense. I love it very good keep it up!!!!!!!!!

[Gosan]

Hey thanks you guys, great feedback and ratings.
(sniff) this means so much to me (sniff)
Anyways, the second episode will be coming up soon, meanwhile, look at my 'official' power levels, just a bit of fun

Power Levels- GokuVSUub
|-----------------------------------|
|--------------GOKU---------------|
|-----------------------------------|
| --------------Goku=100 000 000|
|-----------------------------------|
| -Super Saiyan Goku=320 000 000|
|-----------------------------------|
| Super Saiyan 2 Goku=420 000 000|
|-----------------------------------|
| Super Saiyan 3 Goku=550 000 000|
|-----------------------------------|

|-------------------|
|-------UUB-------|
|-------------------|
| Uub=500 000 000|
|-------------------|

[..::Bardock::.]

Ya might want to change SSJ3 Goku to about 450,000,000 ; and add FPSSJ3 Goku and have him at 550,000,000

[.gogeta the super fusion]

I think the pL is good. don't change it. then goku would have too many forms.

Man this is going to be beter than Pivitor's fic1!!!

[Gosan]

I agree, I think its a good idea not to put Full Power Super Saiyan 3 Goku, there wil lbe too many forms for him, and also that Goku never went all out during the battle with Uub.
I have to thank Pivitor's and his fic for giving me some inspiration for writing my own fic. Thanks

Here is episode 2, its a bit shorter and i sort of rushed in the scenes in the beggining. Besides that, ENJOY !!!!

DRAGON BALL Z 2UUB SAGAEPISODE #2- Uub’s Dark Past

“What is going on?” Uub though desperately trying to figure out what was happening to him. As to answer his question, he was pushed in the light of life. The first thing he saw was a creature with a ‘M’ on his clothes. Uub could not do anything, nothing at all but watch as his body moved out of his control.

Uub watched as he destroyed two god-like beings with a few energy blasts and absorbed one of the gods to gain his power. He was about to finish of the one remaining but a fat god stood in his way. Uub watched in horror as he absorbed him as well. Uub felt the significant weakening of his power as the remaining god spoke in utter bitterness.

“Back in your ball you go Majin Buu’ he said coldly as Uub was once again sent into darkenss.

After what seemed like eternity, Uub once again was in the light, He once again saw the purple god but this time alongside a boy, which both he disposed of with ease. Suddenly a spear went through his stomach, he pulled it out and turned the one who had thrown it into a cookie and ate it. A Super Saiyan 2 appears and fights him, his attacks did not influence anything ; the Saiyan as a last resort blew himself up, having not affected Uub at all.

He then started destroying city after city and also his so called master. He then made friends with a human named Hercule but the rage within him was released after some humans shot him. This evilness turned into a thin version of himself. Uub was turned into chocolate and eaten, forming a more powerful being.

Uub then zoomed up to a great power that he sensed and fought him, getting pretty much injured in the process. He was trapped in the Hyperbolic Time Chamber but got out with his strong sound waves. He then ate all the people outside by turning then into chocolate. The strong fighter called Gotenks followed but then turned into 2 little boys; the same boy he had defeated earlier returns and beats Uub up very easily, until the boys fused again. Uub took this chance of and absorbed the powerful warier, the Namekian who was watching and eventually the boy who had beat him up to a pulp.

Then two Saiyans formed an unbeatable force with another form of fusion, Uub tried all the tricks to his knowledge but failed miserably, he had no choice but to absorb him as well. After some time all the fighters he had absorbed were released and Uub returned to his original state. He then destroyed the earth with a mighty energy ball, followed the two strongest fighters and engaged in an epic battle. After much fighting where each of the warriors took in turns to fight him. A huge spirit bomb was created and was thrown upon him; he then heard these words while trying to push the energy ball back.

“Look like this is the end of the road Buu. It’s a shame, when I first met you I saw good in you. You were a naughty little child that didn’t know any better. But when I watched you become a ruthless killing machine. You were a living nightmare and didn’t’ show a shred of mercy and decency. That’s why it has to end this way. Maybe you’ll come back as a good person, I’d like that. Bye, I’ll be waiting for you Majin Buu. ” Goku pulled his hands back to let more energy out, his body brightened with a yellow glow as he released it with the spirit bomb.

“HAAA !!!!” Goku screamed. The huge ball of energy went coming in Uub’s direction, he grasped to the ball of energy in desperation but his efforts were futile. The looked down as the energy began to engulfing his hands. -FLASH- A great bright light flashed before him without warning.

*******

Uub then saw a bright light, when It faded he found himself in the Hyperbolic Time Chamber. A grinning pink being with an ‘M’ imprinted on his baggy pants laughed manically as it traced his name which started to glow red. The B and U then switched places revealing the new name, BUU.

“I’m this creature…I am Buu?” He said, finally realising the many similarities between them. “But how? I am here, and he is there. What is going on? It makes no sense” he thought.

“BUUAAHH!!!!!!!” Buu cried manically and charged at Uub who braced himself and blocked the attack. Uub then threw his own punch that was also blocked. Uub couldn’t believe it, they were dead even in strength. Uub threw a barrage of kicks and punches at Buu, they were all managed to be blocked. Buu found a weak spot and began his own assault but Uub was ready and blocked all the hits as Buu did. -BANG-Both of then pushed both their fists and locked knuckles. Uub screamed as his aura grew in an instant sending Buu back. Buu started hitting his chest like a gorilla and teleported above Buu and began a machine gun attack. Uub went charging at Buu as he continued to fired the blasts. Uub deflected each one away with ease with his skill. -WHAM- Uub had finally got his hit with his fist at Buu's cheek. -BOOM- -BOOM- -BOOM- BOOM- They both then disappeared, flashes of white and pink could be seen as small explosions occurred every second. -CRACK-When they reappeared Uub had successfully kicked Buu in the ribs

“We are both equal in strength, speed, endurance and power” Uub said, Buu did not listen but began to hit his chest once again. “But you are reckless which proves your weakness as a fighter”

-SMASH-With a flash of speed Uub delivered a spin kick to Buu’s stomach -SCREECH-sending him twirling as he slid across the floor. Buu got really angry and got a significant amount of power boosting as he charged at Uub who was guard. –BAM- Buu head collided with Uub’s chest but Uub managed to take hold of the tentacle grow out of his head –WHAM- SMASH- -WHAM- -SMASH-and began to swing to the ground from side to side. Buu screamed in pain and out of desperation charged a big energy ball and threw it towards Uub. -BOOM-The impact triggered an explosion that forced Uub to retreat and release Buu. -POW- -KAPOW- -POW-The pink demon then pounded Uub in the stomach repeatedly with his fists -WHAM-and kicked Uub downwards with a charged up foot.

-BOOM-Uub crashed into the flow and created a large crate, through the blue smoke from the explosion Uub charged up the energy in his cupped hands. ‘KAMEHAME…” Uub began, Buu say this and charged his own form of Kamehameha and released it towards Uub. “HAAAAAAA !!!!!!!!!!!” Uub screamed with all his might. -CLASH- The two energy beams collided and created a huge beam struggle. Uub was struggling at the very start, his hands were shaking and were slipping slowly. But Uub focused all his energy and pushed the wave towards Buu. Buu then disappeared and reappeared beside Uub and threw him up toward the air, towards his own wave. Uub almost collided with it as but narrowly dodged it. But this was all the time Buu needed. Buu grabbed onto Uub and then started glowing bright pink, his power grew dramatically as he prepared to self-destruct.

*******

“NOOOOOOO !!!!!!!” he screamed in agony as if he was still in the dream he had. His energy exploded as he screamed.

“AAAAAAAHHHHHHH !!!!!!!” Goku screamed in fright as he woke up so suddenly as that scream woke him up with much force

“AAAAAAAHHHHHHH !!!!!!!!” Uub screamed in return seeing Goku screaming,. They two continued to scream until they both realised they were both screaming with each other.

“Oh, its only you Uub, phew!” Goku said -THUD-Extremely relieved he collapsed back onto the smooth grass, still a little shaken.

“Sorry Goku, I had a nightmare” Uub said -THUD-collapsing back on the grass as well.

“So what was the nightmare about then?” Goku asked, he would soon regret saying these very words.

“I was stuck in this darkness, then I started killing these gods, I knocked out Gohan and started destroying cities. The world champ became friends with me and then my evil side ate me up, I battled the people at the tournament, Piccolo, Gohan and this Super Saiyan 3 that called himself Gotenks, I absorbed them all and then fought against a fusion of you and Vegeta, Then I became pure evil and blew up the earth and fought you and Vegeta in a planet and then I fought the crazy pink guy with an M on belt, his name was….” Uub suddenly realised something. “Goku, I’m that evil creature. I did all those things, I’m so sorry” Uub stammered in realisation, the guilt spread through his body like wildfire.

“Uub you were a reincarnation of that Buu but you have a pure heart, you did not do any of this destruction do you understand?” Goku said firmly. “You have no evil in your heart and you have a lot of potential within yourself which is yet to be released, you did nothing wrong”

“I understand Goku, I think”. Uub said uncertainly, Goku then deep in thought for a solution to make him understand fully.

“Go back to sleep I think you should see someone, like yourself. Then you will finally understand” Goku said at last. “I would like to see him too, haven’t seen him for a while”

Uub has experienced the horrors of his past as Majin Buu through his nightmares. Goku says that he will take him to see someone similar to himself. Who is this particular person that he hasn’t seen in a long time? Find out on the next exciting episode of Dragon Ball Z.

Power Levels- UubVSKid Buu
|-------------------|
|-------UUB-------|
|-------------------|
| Uub=500 000 000|
|-------------------|

|-----------------------|
|-------KID BUU-------|
|-----------------------|
| Kid Buu=500 000 000|
|-----------------------|

[.Ghost Outlaw]

Hey...omg that was so great...lol.
But I have a feeling about who the person is..but I'll just have to wait and see...but wow another great chapter so this story. Keep it coming!!!

[SpanktheMonkey]

QUOTE(Super-Dragon-Fist @ Mar 14 2005, 02:46 AM)
Thanks a lot, I really appreciate it. Spelling? I have checked it in word before I posted this. Maybe spell check wasn't on. Regardless, I will improve my spelling in future.

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regardless of spell check you should read over you story as you go along and when you have finished a chapter... this help pick up word thats you worte wrong. ie could and would, plus you may think that your description of sumthing could be better.
now to my review (only read the first chapter however) i may sound a little harsh compared to the others but that doesnt mean i dont like it either.

The Story Line - has good potential.. already miles ahead of gt, so far no plot holes for one (tho that isnt really hard)

Spelling and Grammar - lacking (my section above)

Description - this is the main part that erked me about your fic, you often change how you are telling the story (i cnat be harsh i did this in the start of my own fic) for example you write as if the battle is happening, then you write as if the battle already happened. ie goku had teleported (past tense) as opossed to goku teleported (present tense)

Excitement - once again i have to say lacking... however i do keep in mind that you said that it is only the begining. the only thing is... the fight between goku and uub just moved to fast... there was really no tension either. goku was outmatched so he immediatly ascended to a higher level... straight away.

That all being said i dont think this is a bad fic but it does need sum work ill will try and keep my eye on this over the next couple weeks. look forward to more

[Gosan]

It’s all right SpankTheMonkey, go as harsh as you want; I need some criticism so I can improve my writing in future. I admit I have been rushing the episode so that might be why my spelling is that bad. Woops, I do have to watch out for my tenses and put everything back to the correct tense, need to get rid of the ‘had’ in some cases.

I will try to improve in future, keep this criticism going so I can improve further and develop my skills. As I said, this is my firs fant fic so It may take some time for me to learn, but I will learn, eventually.

Thank you very much for the feedback