Re: A Very Subtle Indifference
Sorry Blacklisted, but this one I do not like. First, it was way too short to convey a proper message. (IMO) If this is one you haven't done in a while, it shows more rust than the previous stories.
I find it lacking in description, and although dialogue can be good, it was a tad stale. But it's good you are having practice.
Last edited by Vivi; 05-08-2008 at 09:29 PM.
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