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Originally Posted by Nikushimi
Everyone is totally out of character.
Description is lacking.
You didn't describe the Akatsuki very well, and I sincerely hope that's not Itachi and Kisame, because you seem to have totally messed-up their personalities.
Akatsuki cloaks have red clouds, not pink clouds. =/
A punch to the face from Super Saiyan Vegeta=death for ANY Akatsuki member.
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meeny!
Just kidding, I enjoy having both good and bad opinions so hat I know what to correct. Well I really did think those clouds were pink, but I see it now. About the punch=death thing, well they are from 2 different worlds where in one, Vegeta's punch to the face of someone who had the power level of an Akatsuki would meen death, while something might be different for the laws of physics in Naruto's world. I don't know how different laws of physics would mix-up exactly, so I'm just making stuff up for now. And to be completely honest, I don't know what Akatsuki members they are! I never actually heard who each guy was, so I just pictured a tall guy and a short guy and thought "I'll figure it out later" and because of that I had to make sure I didn't show ANY personality or else they might seem like a specific guy and then I might make them a different guy and people would say "that's not his personality" I'll try fixing all this later, so please don't make this seem like too bad of a fic for now. It will probably get a lot better once I watch more Naruto and fix all these mistakes. And could you be more specific of who's out of character (well, everyone but how?) and I'll try to get more description into the next chapter and I'll edit some parts of this one to.