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Old 02-10-2008   #10 (permalink)
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Default Re: My 1st fanfic:DBZ:what happened to Goten?

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Originally Posted by JC#1 View Post
I did use paragraphs.
Isn't a paragraph when after a few sentences(like 3 to 5 or something) you indent like
this?And you also do a new paragraph when people talk.Like=
"blah blah" he said.
I've been doing that the whole time.
Yeah, you have been doing that but you need 2 put space in between, like:

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I copied someones theory for that i dunno who but it helps explain.

By the way nice chapter I really liked it how Vegeta cried an all, LoL it made me feel sorry for him. Everything about this chapter was great keep up the good work. Cant wait for the next chapter.
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