Re: Altered History - Saga VI
chapter one (I go on a chapter to chapter basis when I review)
Did you know...That Sango, Hotaru, and Gainin are all character names from Anime/Games? That was a little distracting for me, but I'm sure it wasn't on purpose. I just sort of lulz'd and moved on.
Anyway, I like. I felt like I didn't know some of the original characters very well, most likely since this is the first saga I read, but you did a pretty good job not making them too complex upon introduction. The metal arm was a nice idea too, I can pretty much envision Autoro hitting Videl with it.
Chapter two:
I wish I knew more about Mijima/Gainin/Autoro. Where Gohan was talking to him about his kids, I got sort of lost. But that's my bad for not reading previous sagas.
Ah, Goku and his mispronunciations that set up for explanations. <3 ^_^
Haha, Bulma's natural hair color is purple then? I guess only Vegeta would've known if the carpet didn't match the drapes.
Aww, not as much action as in the first chapter. More of a set-up sort of thing, then? With a little thrown in laugh-out-loud moments?
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