Joot's Raps/Poems
Your rhymes are way too elementary. I mean look at the last words on your second poem.
kid
did
hid
forbid
did
grid
skid
bid
mid
kid
slid
is
kid
sit
did
hit
shin
this
pissed
it is…
s**t,
this…
kids
did
fit…
intelligent
within
within my skin
it again…
That's just unacceptable. Not only did you rhyme most of the same words over and over, and not only are most of them 3 letter words, you also ended every line with the same sound throughout the entire verse. That's a big no-no. Try rhyming bigger words together. And change it up the sound every few lines to make it less boring. Don't forget that metaphors, similes, and mutli-syllable rhymes are your friend, not your enemy.
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